Sing a New Song
We are walking in the deep, deep dark,
Stagger suddenly beneath this weight
Has the future ever seemed so stark?
Have you ever felt your heart so ache?
But the light that flows into these shadowlands
Only the passion of God could create
He will lift off your burden to let you stand--
This is the peace for which we wait
(Chorus)
Wake up, wake up, and sing a new song;
Glory to God, here comes the True Dawn
Wake up, wake up, and sing a new song
We are sleeping in the night of fear,
In the rhythm of a chained routine
How we long for anywhere but here,
Stuck inside a spiritless machine
But the clean, cool water of freedom
Is an awakening, cleansing stream
And if you follow where the flowing is leading,
You will be led to the Love Supreme
(CHORUS)
This is a song of God’s perfect salvation,
A song we hear and sing day after day:
If you give Him glory, as His song repeats,
You will join His story, He will give you peace
With the echoes of shepherds, and the angels' shouts,
Hear the joy of all Heaven flying from your mouth
For the song that you claim at the first every morn
Blossoms new, yet the same as when the Christ child was born, so...
(CHORUS)
Wake up, wake up, and sing a new song;
Glory to God, here comes the True Dawn
Wake up, wake up, and sing;
Wake up, wake up, and sing;
Wake up, wake up, and sing a new song
NSAI Evaluation
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NASHVILLE SONGWRITERS ASSOCIATION INTERNATIONAL SONG EVALUATION
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EVALUATORS OPENING: Hi Brian, I’m evaluator #97. Welcome to NSAI song evaluation. Keep in mind that these are only my opinions and are meant to be helpful with your song crafting skills.
FORM/STRUCTURE:see below under "melody"
HOOK/IDEA:You may want to create more clarity with your hook idea.
LYRIC:You have some nice imagery here and there in your lyric Brian. There is a need for more detail opposed to abstract in the lyric. Detail helps to understand the storyline. It's not clear what the "clean cool water of freedom" represents. In other words, mixing abstracts with enough detail to find more clarity in the storyline may be needed. The chorus melody may need to be doubled to get the full impact of this catchy chorus. This would entail writing a new stanza and not repeating the 1st one again.
MELODY/METER (IF APPLICABLE):The verse melody is pretty. The chorus has a catchiness to it. The prechorus may need to lift more into the chorus. It may only need to be a few lines long. The chorus may need to be longer (another stanza) with a more lift at the end of the 1st stanza. The bridge also may only need to be a few lines long. (2-4)
COMMERCIAL VIABILITY:not at this time
CLOSING COMMENTS:Brian, you have some pretty melodies in your song. There may be a need to restructure as well as create more detail. Keep up the good work Brian and thanks for using NSAI's evaluation service.
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